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Paradise
I walked lonely and lonely on a silent street
Saw empty benches where dear ones meet
Underneath were impressions of invisible feet

Tenderly touched by the cool breeze
Heartily greeted by nodding trees
Oh! I was like a guest to a land of love and peace

The daffodils in yellow
Looked up and said hello!
I was standing in a meadow
Basking in The heavenly glow
Eternal bliss as far as the mind could go
Like an enchanted audience in a cardist's show.

The leaves so mesmerizing like the spades of cards
My joy now equivalent to the thirteen hearts
Clear water falling like diamonds
I felt like the queen of my club ready to commence

I was in my world, my world of pleasure
Wanting to keep this safe, safe as a treasure
My mind was fresh and pleased
Wanting this tranquility never to cease
But, the silence didn't last for long
As it was broken by another dawn

This happiness and serenity in my world of fantasy
A paradox it is, in the world of reality.
The thumbnail is of the very talented chibionpu. this is her painting.

This is one of my most favourite poems...I experienced this...this feeling when i was writing it...truly, it felt like Paradise.

I hope my readers enter into the world of ecstasy too....

Peace \m/
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KyceSilverFalcon Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
When I read this, not only do I sense the emotion of joy conveyed so wonderfully, but I also get a feeling of nostalgia, as well. Because if you've ever felt this, you never forget the sensation.:aww:
And I prefer to use a rhyming scheme in my poetry as well. Very nice indeed.
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MissTsukii Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
awwww i'm glad you feel that way! rhyming words give that extra positive and happy vibe to the poem! even if teh subject is dark it gives it that pump! xDDD
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KyceSilverFalcon Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It really does. And it makes it easier to come up with the poem verse by verse.:aww:
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BleedTheDream180 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
lol i'm gonna fav this because you rhymed hello and yellow, and i've never seen someone do that, that's awesome xD
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MissTsukii Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconmonkeygrinplz: Really??? gee thanks!
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
last 2 lines are so true - but not for long (Revelation 21:3,4)
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MissTsukii Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hehe....yeah i guess... i should have a look at the revelation now though xD
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The-Raven-Soul Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful... I have no words to describe how amazing this is!
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MissTsukii Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you so much! :iconmonkeyloveplz:
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The-Raven-Soul Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome even more! :iconiloveitmoreplz:
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shadownate Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
to have such a feeling while reading rhis, you, you seriously have a gift, in which you can not let go to waste, please continue to write. ilove this poem & ijust read it once. thank you, thank you, thank you for this<3
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MissTsukii Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So many kind words in one one comment! thank you so much... :) Yes, I'll surely I will continue writing...
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shadownate Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
no problem just being truthful(: & good, im glad!
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MissTsukii Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
(:
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shadownate Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
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UpToThem Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Student General Artist
this is fantastic, i love this feeling. it's an ethereal feeling of being contently trapped in a time of day. thank you for this.
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MissTsukii Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconawwwplz: That's very sweet of you...i am glad you could feel it the way i did... :)
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Daft-Enigma Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is absolutely beautiful!

What a wonderful feeling, to actually experience your poem! (:
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MissTsukii Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconawwwplz: that is totally my point of writing this....I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem...i surely am...it's my first poem on DA...I am basically an artist...but do you think i should put on more of my poems here??
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Daft-Enigma Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I think you should put up whatever you want to put up. I, like any good artist, believe in being yourself. I admire an artist's work not only for what it is or the quality, but for the artist itself that I find in the work.

Keep writing poems if it makes you happy! But don't stop drawing if you love doing that- and thereafter? Share it with whomever you please! Keep them to yourself, or show all of dA, or the world. It's up to you (:
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MissTsukii Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you so much for your wise words...i put up some more...
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PearlsCat Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful. Amazing work.
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MissTsukii Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thanks a lot!! this really means a lot to me... <3
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