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Scarlet

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Scarlet

Red hot ball of fire, burning in the skies.
So bright it could burn your eyes!

Embedded on the façade of a sapphire visage,
From it, tiny turquoise dwarves scattered out large.
Secretive, submissive yet, sacred.
Falling, a fountain of golden threads, beaded.

Enlightening everything in its way,
Pearls shining as bright as day.
Scintillating at the touch of his,
Lotus blooming, a  dark pink kiss.

From clouds to the horizon, when he sets down,
An embodiment of beauty, wearing warmth as a silk gown.

Lovers, friends and children call it the hour of joy,
Only if the grey soul could lift her head,
She could glance at the beautiful sky painted in….

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This poem is inpired from =PixieCold and =sanguisGelidus art!!! THEY ARE AN AWESOME DUO! and jonas writes amazing poetry too!! xD
The sun is really a great concept to write! I normally write simple poems, using simple vocabulary,but i tried more complex, deep approach in this one! please do tell me how you feel about this style of writing. oh yes! i hope you understand, please do read the title after you're done with the poem! <3 inspired from *DearPoetry

oh yeah, the prev image is by the AWESOME and pretty =PixieCold!! xD <3
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:star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

The first thing i noticed about this poem was not the sexy preview but that you used couplets of slanted rhyme. I have frequently referred writers to Emily Dickinson, one of the first poets of modern age to do that. You share her talent, as do i. The rhyme of your couplets is refreshing. I refer to the main stanza.. On the whole, this poem is unique. Well-written and clever. The preview is sexy btw. I wish to read more like this, and will be pleased to review them. Keep writing like this and note the responses, including my and other reviews. Good work.